What gose in the girls cabin: Writing 2016 portfoldio post

Description: In Poutama as you know we went on a awesome camp and we chose to write about camp and i'm writing about what goes on in the girls cabin at night! First we had to write down ideas and things about camp in our writers notebook and then after that we chose how we are going to write and we chose from a thing called PIES which means persuade, inform, entertain or self, my one is entertain because I love to write like that. Then we chose what were going to write about as you already know i'm writing what goes on in the girls cabin 18 at night. So I started to write and I was really happy with it but then we went back to our story and re crafted, which is to add better words/ onomatopoeia punctuation etc... Then we started to write it down on the computer and finally put it on our blog! I hope you like my writing I spent a long time making it.



Feedback/feedforward: I think you did a good job on adding detail and doing a good hook for your story. Next time I think you could add more interesting sentences and words. -Zara

Evaluation:Thanks Zara I also think I did well with detail and yes I did have some problems with adding more juicy words.

I statement video.

Description:In Poutama we are learning about I statements, and for example if someone says something mean to you under there breath you could say I feel... when... because. First we had to pick what were doing for the situation for the I statement then we started to video we had a lot of videos but in the end we finished. We hope you like it.

Camp portfoldio sample 2016

Description: Camp was amazing, El Rancho camp. On a mild morning we left at 8.50 in the morning and everyone was exited. We got at the camp and we went straight into activities, we had 10 activities that we did they were, Tall water slide, horse riding, kayaking, low ropes, team initiative, pool, archery, mini golf, rifles and rafts. My favourite one is archery I'v been wanting to do it for a long time and to do my dream is awesome. I have some pictures of what my time has been like at camp.

Feedback/feedforward: I think its good that you worked well with your group and that you still did the water slide even though you were scared. Next time you should add more detail. -Zara 

Family tree TE Reo E portfoldio sample 2016

Description: On a Monday afternoon we started a to make a Måori family tree. First we had to get the family we new and write it down in our think book and that was our draft. Then we started to make our good copy we could make it on anything and i chose simple pic monkey because its easy to use. First in big letters I wrote my name and I'm a only child so i didn't need to write anything else next to me apart from my cousin then I just went up in generations but I only know up to my grand parents.

This is my family tree:

Feedback/Feedforward: I think you did a good job on making it clear so me and everyone else who see's this post can read it clearly, Also I liked how you made it basic with a groovy font so it makes me want to read it. (No Mistakes!) -Zara

Evaluation: Thanks Zara for the positive feedback I really appreciate it but I do think that next time I could get a bit more room so that I can fit in my uncle better.

One word 2016 portfolio sample.

Description: Our one is our word for 2016. first we chose our one word and then we sherd them by tweeting them on twitter. And then we make block letters of them and made a draft of the word and decorated them. After we cheeked with a teacher we stated to make the real copy. I hope you like it.
My one word is Creative! I chose these designs because I want to be creative and free with my letters but still make them look good at the same time.

Feedback/Feedforward: I think you did a good job at making your text bold and lots of colour. Next time you could make the "e" more creative, other than that I think you did a good job.

Evaluation: Thanks Zara I do agree with you I was just stuck on what to do but I still really like my art work.

Camp goals.

Description: Yay camp is only next week and I'm super exited, so when camp is about to come we do goals! When we do our goals we have two of them. The first one is my personal goal so a goal for me to think about over camp ad show that goal through out camp. Then second goal is a active goal an active goal is one with all of the people around you.

My goals: